lunes, 24 de octubre de 2011

Descriptive Essay

OUTLINE
Introduction
  •  Idea of college life

Paragraph I
  • ·        Last day in my house/room

Paragraph II
  • ·        Arrival al new house

Paragraph III
  • ·        Saying goodbye

Conclusion
HOME SWEET HOME
            I had always thought about going to college since I was a child. The idea of moving out from my parents’ house and living in another state was very terrifying but appealing at the same time. Moving in with friends and starting a college life seemed very interesting to me. I never thought it would be a hard thing to do, but I was wrong.
            It was a Sunday afternoon before the first day of college and I was getting my suitcase ready with all the stuff I needed to take with me. It seemed that it was taking a lot longer than I thought it would, and the reason was because as I folded neatly every shirt, I would look around my room as if to memorize every detail in it. I stared at brick colored walls, the arched window, the cabinets which on its´ top contained many photo frames with pictures of me with my friends in my high school years and then I saw my bed. I couldn´t help to think of how much I was going to miss my bed once I was in my new home and I  stopped folding my shirt and jumped into my bed. I grabbed my pillow and set it under my head cradling my neck in a perfect way. It was soft and cozy and my bed shaped my body like knowing the exact spots that needed to be filled in. I laid there staring at the ceiling which contained glow in the dark stars that I had pasted in my early teens. I closed my eyes and started breathing evenly noticing the cinnamon apple smell my room had. I dozed of for a moment until I heard my mom calling me to bring my luggage downstairs, I quickly stood up and grabbed everything I needed and stuffed it into my suitcase. I grabbed it and before I stood out the door, I glanced back for a final look at my bedroom.
            We were now heading to Aguascalientes where the university that I was going to attend is located, and the whole way there I pretended to be asleep, I was not really in the mood to talk about anything. We finally arrived to the house where I was going to spend the next few years and as I stepped out of the car I realized the house was a dark green color. It was a two story house with a fence, the same color as the house, surrounding it, no plants or trees in the front, just the door. My dad took my luggage form the car and I reached into my pocket for the key with my mom by my side. I took the key out of my pocket and placed it in the key hole hoping it wouldn´t turn, but it did and I turned the knob to open the door. I was the first to step inside and as soon as I did that, my nose started sensing the smell. It was and old, rusty smell, like that one of antique, stored things. It was painted a strange, dark orange color. There were two bedrooms, one bathroom, a living room and a kitchen was very basic and there was not much furniture, just the dining table in the living room and my bed in one of the bedrooms. My mom followed me and looked around probably looking to see if it was a safe enough place for her first born to stay. My dad came in afterwards with my luggage and placed it down. There was not much left for them to do now, and that awkward, not knowing what to say silence began. It lasted just a few seconds before the hard part came.
            “Well, we have better get going, we do not want to drive at night,” I remember my dad saying. As soon as he said that, it seem that all my blood dropped to my legs and a depressing felling came to me. I had a knot in my throat, but I managed to stammer out an “ok.” I wanted to let my tears roll down my face, to hold them tight and tell them to take me with them. I wanted to scream,
            “Please, do not leave me here,” but I knew better than that and I held all that back and controlled myself. My dad was a very strong man that did not show his emotions at all, so he just hugged me and said goodbye. I hugged him back as his hug gave me comfort and helped me be a bit stronger, but I knew he would not be the problem. My mom and I have always been really close and when she hugged me, we both burst into tears. We shared that same horrible feeling of not knowing what was going to happen, a mixture of confusion and fear. We knew this was going to happen sooner or later and before she stopped hugging me I took a deep breath and smelled her sweet, homelike scent. I walked with them to the door and I waved goodbye. I saw them get into the car and in what seemed to me as a matter of seconds they drove away and were gone. I went back inside, locked the door and stared at the emptiness house that seemed to say,
            “Welcome, to the college life!”
            It has been more than a year now since that day and I am more used to living here. It has not been very easy but my roommates and I motivate each other. However, every time I go home and I come back, it is like I am living the same process over and over again. I now one day I will get used to it but it was nothing like I imagined it would be when I was younger. I could not wait to live by my own with no parents and now I can not wait to see them again every time I can. It has just taught me to enjoy my family’s company as much as I can!



jueves, 6 de octubre de 2011

Outline of the essay

OUTLINE OF THE ESSAY
SIMPLY ME
LUZ MARIA ACOSTA ESPARZA
INTRODUCTION
·         Introduce readers to what the essay is going to be about and basic information about me. This includes:
Ø  Name
Ø  Birthday and place of birth
Ø  Age
Ø  Family members
Ø  Home town
BODY
·         Give readers important events of my life from an early age of childhood till now.
Ø  Childhood
Ø  Teenager
Ø  Becoming an adult
CONCLUSION
·         Summarize the information given before and conclude the essay. 

Corrected Essay

Simply Me
I’d like to say that I am famous writer or actress living in New York surrounded by fans and paparazzi. Having a famous name seen on billboards, newspapers or being heard on television. Living in a big house with shiny new cars and maids to do the housework.  However, that is just what I would like to say. Actually I am just a small town girl with no famous name and no shiny cars, but here is a bit about my life so far.
My name is Luz Maria Acosta Esparza and a young married couple by the names of Joel Acosta Luna and Maria de la Luz Esparza Acosta gave birth to me in Rome, Italy! Al right enough of that, I was actually born in Aguascalientes, Aguascalientes, Mexico on April 22th of 1992. I was their first born child and they took me home to Villa Hidalgo, Jalisco. A year after I was born they took me to the United States but we came back to Mexico shortly after. We were a very happy family, but that did not last very long. My mother gave birth to a baby boy who is three and a half years younger than me whose name is Joel. Time passed and I started kindergarten, finished first grade, second grade and entering third grade is a traumatizing part of my life. 
            When I finished my second year of elementary school my parents decided to move for a period of time to the United States and to my surprise I was going to start my third grade in Phoenix, Arizona. So, on that August I went to a bilingual school and things seemed to flow very well. English was not much of a problem but because of my dads’ job, we had to moved.  We move to Fountain Hills, Arizona where I can almost affirm that I was the only Mexican in the entire school and being surrounded by non-Spanish speakers was a nightmare. I cried and cried because going to school was really horrible but it only took me that year to fully learn English. I started fourth grade there, but once again we had to move, this time to Valencia, California. In California, it was really different, in my school there were basically just Latin students, but I didn’t have to worry about that anymore, I already knew English. I finished my fourth grade year there but once again we had to move, now to Midway, Utah. There I saw snow for the first time and I really love the cold weather. We stayed there for about a year and a half, and then we went back to California but this time to Indio and I started my teenager years. There I made really good friends that I am still in contact with. We then moved to the once again nice, snowy and cold weather that I like, but this time to Colorado. I finished middle school there and yes, once again we moved and I started high school in Nampa, Idaho. However, we only stayed there for 6 months and then another big change in my life came. We were going to move back to Mexico.
            Another traumatizing change was going to happen in my life that I did not want. I wanted to stay in the United States and start taking classes so that I could study medicine once I finished high school. But you don’t always get what you want and my dad made us move to Mexico. I started my ninth grade year in a middle school near my house and I had a lot of trouble with my Spanish. However, I quickly made new friends that helped me out. My family made me my quinceanera and although it wasn’t what I expected I am really grateful that they did it.  A graduated from middle school and by that time I had lots of friends who taught me everything I needed to know about Villa Hidalgo. One of those friends is my now best friend Cecy. We have been friends ever since I move here to Mexico. I started high school and had lots of wonderful experiences in that stage of my life. I meet a certain special someone in my life now, my boyfriend Carlos. I graduated high school second of my class and was not so sure what career too chose. I wanted to be a doctor but I was scared that I wouldn’t be able to get into that career so I chose English language teaching. I did think about being a teacher, but I never thought of being an English teacher. However, this is the career that I am in now and I am going to do my best effort.
            Well, we have reached present day and this is what I am and have done so far in life and I am grateful for each and every thing. Now, in college I have met very wonderful people, ones who have become new best friends like Monica and Kellcy. I love being surrounded by people that care about me and being able to meet lots of new people too. For the future, I would like to finish my career and start a new one. Recently I have been seriously thinking in psychology, but I still have a few months to think about that. For now, I want to enjoy each and every moment of my life, enjoy the company of my family, friends and boyfriend. After all you are only nineteen once and I can see the twenties near. So, I may not be a famous writer living in New York but everything that I am, I love and that is simply me.